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The Darkness

door killea

When the darkness creeps upon me
And fills me with sadness so deep
I am alone as always
Forever tired, unable to sleep
I manage to do my work
Barely coping with daily tasks
No-one sees the pain I feel
If by chance someone asks
I smile and say I'm okay
Whilst my internal voice screams
At night, when I close my eyes
Come the heart-breaking dreams
Although I know this too will pass
As I've learned to face each session
It really is bloody hard
To live one's life with depression.

 

feedback van andere lezers

  • Magdalena
    heel herkenbaar... gelukkig maar soms

    prachtig gedicht, echt waar!

    XXXX
    killea: Thank you, appreciate your fb.

    xx
  • lief
    shout!

    liefs
    killea: Thank you for reading my poetry - looking forward to your next submission.

    June
  • Lazey
    recognizable, but curable...
    killea: That's what they say.

    thanks
    Lazey
  • Mistaker
    Curable, but it takes time...

    Regards,
    Greta
    killea: Thank you, Mistaker.

    regards
    June
  • stormvonk
    De anglofiel in mij (heb er lang geleefd) vind dit goed, hou zelf niet zo van rijmen enzo maar toch bewonderingswaardig hoe je in een andere taal toch je eigen stem kan laten horen

    groet
    killea: Thank you.
    regards
    june
  • marrik
    let me put a smile
    on your face
    you'r poetry is
    a poker player's ace
    this poem is verry dark
    if i could
    i would take you
    for a walk in a park
    i tryed my verry best
    to give you a smile
    like the rest

    killea: You are the best..

    xx
  • otiske
    Heel herkenbaar neergezet, knap gedaan, groetjes.
    killea: Thank you, otiske.

    regards
    June
  • Klaver4
    knap beschreven en beklijvend!!!
    masking the pain with a saddened smile!
    als ge goed kijkt, ziet ge dat wel zenne bij mensen
    psje: ik zelf had mss op die and en die but regel na elkaar, de and en but verwisseld van plaats maar ben gene native speaker, so...
    gr
    klaver4
    killea: Thank you, Klaver4.
    regards
    June
  • Aramis
    but when I come home
    she makes it all worthwhile
    she makes me love
    and she makes smile ...
    killea: Thank you.

    regards
    June
  • aquaangel
    the darkness that I know is my friend en enemy
    today I also put an Engelish poem on the site :) haha just trying as you can see..
    killea: Hi Angel. Sent you feedback on your poem, just a couple of changes you should make. Sometimes less is more! Keep it up.

    thanks for above.

    June
  • Francis
    You could be me..
    Greetings Francis
    killea: How great is that? thanks Francis

    june
  • lucky
    graag gelezen
    killea: Thanks

    June
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