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How Could She

door killea

How could she have loved so deeply, lost herself so completely
now a shadow of herself, lying broken on the shelf
lovers come and lovers go, she sees their despair, they do not know
no-one can fill the gap, the inexorable void, left on the map,
mystical beyond reason, drawn by love's dawn

the passion grand, with no demand, the sweetest man
left her bed to head for his home, he turned and said
je t'adore, and she replied je t'adore, je t'adore smiled and
closed her eyes, so he couldn't see the lies, the real her
his heart was filled, her tears were spilled, ability to love killed.

 

feedback van andere lezers

  • GoNo2
    Meeslepend, sad, en ontroernd mooi neergeschreven
    Chapeau !
    killea: Thank you for the compliment, Noel
    xx
    j
  • Magdalena
    Mooi, heel vloeiend en voelbaar verdriet voor de onvervangbare grote liefde

    Killea, in de tweede strofe scheelt er iets, maar ik ben te moe nu.

    je t'adore, and she mirrored his words, je t'adore, her lips smiled
    she closed her eyes to hide the lies and cover her soul,

    zoiets???
    XXXXX slaapwel


    killea: Thanks Magdalena, sleep well
    xxx
    j
  • tessy
    Heel mooi, knap June
    groet
    Tessy
    killea: Thank you, Tessy love
    xx
    j
  • yellow
    she always said not with me again and again
    but now she's hurt again, moving poem,
    M.
    killea: thank you, Marc
    xx
    j
  • jan
    torn between two lovers, a lovers tragedy...

    xxx
    j
    killea: thank you, Jan
    xxx
    j
  • anne
    Painfully but beautiful!
    killea: Thank you, Anne
    xxx
    j
  • Mistaker
    So sad...

    Greta xx
    killea: Thanks, Greta
    xxx
    j
  • lief
    just because...

    xxx
    liefs
    killea: Thank you, liefie
    xxx
    j
  • mephistopheles
    I've been busy the last couple of weeks. But haven't forgotten your writing. Great as always.
    xx
    killea: You are too kind. thank you Mephistopheles
    xxx
    j
  • Lucky
    meeslepend
    killea: Thanks, Lucky
    xxx
    j
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