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Ode to You
Shattered dreams
fill my life's song
you understand
keep me strong
protect me with your love
so pure and non-judgemental
I give thanks to the universe above
for your sweetness is elemental
as my spirit falls apart
you reach across the border
you take my hand and fill my heart
give perspective to all the disorder
in your eyes the recognition
the window to your soul
your words and composition
honour me, make me whole
©Killea
feedback van andere lezers- GoNo2
Love it ! killea: Thank you Noel,
xxx
j - b_engel
prachtig
wie dit krijgt zal er heel blij mee zijn!
lekker warmpjes houden en koesteren!
liefs
XXX killea: Thank you so much b engel
xxx
j - alie_jankind
je zet hier een mooi gedicht neer!
bij hardop lezen
het het moelijk de lange woorden in het ritme
te lezen no- judgementeal , elemental
ik ben wat met je tekst gaan spelen ...
Shattered dreams
fill my life's song
you understand
and keep me strong
protect me with your love
so pure and open minded
then I thank the universe above
for your winding sweetness
as my spirit falls apart
you reach over the border
take my hand and fill my heart
with perspective to all disorder
in your eyes is recognition
the window of your soul
your words and composition
honour me, make me whole
zie maar of je er wat mee kunt/wilt
groeten
killea: Thank you Alie for your FB. I appreciate that you went to the trouble of rewriting my poem, and comprehend your comments, but I stand by my poetry, for better or worse. Many thanks for your efforts.
xx
j - yellow
some friendship is more then just friendship and it's amazing when you could have someone like you said above,
i'm sure the person who you write this for is verry happy with your ode,
Marc
xxx
wish you a nice spring-sun-sunday killea: Thank you Marc!
xxx
j - Mistaker
Beautiful.
Greta xx killea: Thank you Greta
xx
j - drebddronefish
Splendid ode, a joy to read
greets killea: many thanks, dddfish
xx
j - miepe
yes beautiful, maar af en toe vind ik het wat in of naar een modelzin klinken.
fill my heart-bijvoorbeeld
maar het blijft wel mooi killea: Thank you Miepe, af en toe ik ook
xxx
j - jan
sad and deep as you...(Dave Mason)
xx
j killea: yes, Jan, thank you.
xxx
j - tessy
Heel mooi killea: Thank you Tessy
xx
j - anne
Lovely!! killea: Thank you Anne
xxx
j - secret
Zo mooi
Koester het
killea: Thank you Secret
xx
j - Ivan
Love, Ivan grid killea: thank you, Ivan
xx
j
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