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Betere leesbaarheid

He looked the same

door killea

He came back
he looked the same
a little older around the eyes
from the shrapnel his leg a little lame
wearing medals of courage
he need have no shame

with dignity
he buried his comrade
no excessive emotion
was ever displayed
the sun was high
he sought out the shade

he made love
to his patient wife
with intensity
no frills, raw, gripping life
his long silences
cut like a knife

lost spontaneity, the cheeky grin
would come back soon they said
in no time at all
he'll pick up the thread
no-one saw
the internal tears he shed

he embraced his mother
he could not confide
squeezed his child
so hard she cried
assured his wife
everything's fine, he lied

he walked into the sea
with determined stride

he had come back, and looked the same.....



 

feedback van andere lezers

  • klaver4
    I don't read compassion in this, only sadness, important things that got lost in the brutal war of sexes, of missed compassion! When people don't own themselves and follow a life-story of someone else who forfaited their own lives, and handed over their problems to their offspring (probaby written incorrectly, but hey, look at the clock....;o).
    Touching and moving June. Straight to the bone!
    Summary for me of this poem would have to be: please, addressee, shift gear!
    In recent weeks I've re-learned - perhaps remembered would be a better word, I don't know actually, I'm walking on eggs last couple of weeks - one thing: I only live once, perhaps more, but that eventually is for time to tell....
    Take care June!
    Nice bitter-sweet very layered poem!!!
    xxx
    Dicky
    killea: Thank you Dicky. Yes, the poem has many layers, but was actually inspired by a Dutch film I recently watched "Stella's Oorlog" about the war in Uruzgan. Will mail you on Sunday.
    xx
    j
  • Zingendevleugel
    zeer schone letters mooi! in ritme inhoudelijk zonnig xx
    killea: many thanks
    xx
    j
  • ivo
    ik lees ironie en een opgegeten mens, die zijn menszijn ergens heeft achtergelaten en als een onverschillige huls zijn leven verder zet, maar feitelijk al lang is overleden ... heel mooi neergezet June (zo lees ik het toch ...)
    killea: Ja zo is het, Ivo
    xx
    j
  • ppe
    poetisch vind ik het een beetje langdraadig maar qua inhoud wel sterk
    killea: Thank you ppe
    xx
    j
  • lin
    Mooi poŽtisch verwoord wat die verschrikkelijke oorlog kan veroorzaken. Uiteraard in meerdere opzichten te lezen.
    Lees je mijn gedicht Verweggistan eens? Dat gaat over een ander aspect van de oorlog, vanuit een kind bezien,
    liefs lin
    killea: Thank you lin, will look at your poem immediately
    xx
    j
  • alie_jankind
    Pijnlijk dit vers.
    Voor mij mag het wel de helft korter,
    het gedicht leent zich er goed voor om het krachtiger neer te zetten, wie weet kun je er zelfs twee verzen van maken.

    hartelijke groet
    killea: Many thanks Alie, also for the good advice
    xx
    j
  • tessy
    heel mooi
    killea: Thank you Tessy
    xx
    j
  • jan
    war what is it good for..

    xx
    j
    killea: Nothing, darling, absolutely nothing
    xxx
    j
  • elpe
    "his long silences - cut like a knife"
    is voor mij een doordenker waard.

    elpe
    killea: many thanks, elpe
    xx
    j
  • Mistaker
    Reminds me of the movie Le retour de Martin Guerre.
    So sad...

    Greta xx
    killea: Thank you Greta
    xx
    j
  • jamal
    scars often spoken, mostly dead..

    so strong written June, deep respect!


    xxx
    killea: Many thanks, Jamal
    xx
    j
  • yellow
    always moving poems
    M.
    killea: Thank you Marc
    xx
    j
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