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Lun art(ic) (senryu)

door killea


Lun art(ic)


moonlight melted ghost
strange shadow chat stinging raw
frozen silhouettes

 

feedback van andere lezers

  • Hazen
    Just great, Killea! xx
    killea: many thanks Hazen
    xx
    j
  • tessy
    prachtig
    killea: thank you Tessy
    xx
    j
  • kerima_ellouise
    mooi!

    groetekes
    killea: thank you kerima ellouise
    xx
    j
  • jan
    brrrrrrrr,suddenly it's freezing cold here, chickenskin poetry June ssssan!

    xxx
    j

    killea: then my work is done well, Jansan
    xxx
    j
  • hettie35
    Heel mooi,

    groetjes Hettie
    killea: thank you Hettie
    xx
    j
  • Hoeselaar
    Brrr, daar krijg ik het koud van

    willy
    killea: goed zo Willy
    xx
    j
  • manono
    I don't understand 'chat stinging raw' but read 'frozen' in the meaning of a frozen image or a frozen moment.
    killea: Appreciate your comments, and although I do not usually explain what I write as I feel it takes the magic out of poetry, I shall make an exception. This senryu has a conscious three-tier interpretation (perhaps more, but that is for the reader to determine) and it is all ready conspicuous in the title; Lunar, Lunar Art and Lunatic.

    Lunar: moonlight soothes scary image/natural (trees) shadow boxing/shapes frozen in time.
    Lunar Art: moonlight softens phantom-like shadow/moving shadows of couple making out/silhouettes of immobile objects.
    Lunatic: romance overcame and dissolved something in the past/unexpected shades of recurrence and pain/cold outlined memory.
    Thank you for reading and FB
    xx
    j
  • martine
    wondermooi
    liefs
    xxx
    killea: many thanks Martine appreciate you FB
    xx
    j
  • klaver4
    beautiful!!!; makes me think of the images / memories passing before my eyes in le crépuscule!
    xxx
    Dicky
    killea: Thank you Dicky
    xxx
    j
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