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The Darkness
When the darkness creeps upon me
And fills me with sadness so deep
I am alone as always
Forever tired, unable to sleep
I manage to do my work
Barely coping with daily tasks
No-one sees the pain I feel
If by chance someone asks
I smile and say I'm okay
Whilst my internal voice screams
At night, when I close my eyes
Come the heart-breaking dreams
Although I know this too will pass
As I've learned to face each session
It really is bloody hard
To live one's life with depression.
feedback van andere lezers- Magdalena
heel herkenbaar... gelukkig maar soms
prachtig gedicht, echt waar!
XXXX killea: Thank you, appreciate your fb.
xx - lief
shout!
liefs killea: Thank you for reading my poetry - looking forward to your next submission.
June - Lazey
recognizable, but curable... killea: That's what they say.
thanks
Lazey - Mistaker
Curable, but it takes time...
Regards,
Greta killea: Thank you, Mistaker.
regards
June - stormvonk
De anglofiel in mij (heb er lang geleefd) vind dit goed, hou zelf niet zo van rijmen enzo maar toch bewonderingswaardig hoe je in een andere taal toch je eigen stem kan laten horen
groet killea: Thank you.
regards
june - marrik
let me put a smile
on your face
you'r poetry is
a poker player's ace
this poem is verry dark
if i could
i would take you
for a walk in a park
i tryed my verry best
to give you a smile
like the rest
killea: You are the best..
xx - otiske
Heel herkenbaar neergezet, knap gedaan, groetjes. killea: Thank you, otiske.
regards
June - Klaver4
knap beschreven en beklijvend!!!
masking the pain with a saddened smile!
als ge goed kijkt, ziet ge dat wel zenne bij mensen
psje: ik zelf had mss op die and en die but regel na elkaar, de and en but verwisseld van plaats maar ben gene native speaker, so...
gr
klaver4 killea: Thank you, Klaver4.
regards
June - Aramis
but when I come home
she makes it all worthwhile
she makes me love
and she makes smile ... killea: Thank you.
regards
June - aquaangel
the darkness that I know is my friend en enemy
today I also put an Engelish poem on the site :) haha just trying as you can see.. killea: Hi Angel. Sent you feedback on your poem, just a couple of changes you should make. Sometimes less is more! Keep it up.
thanks for above.
June - Francis
You could be me..
Greetings Francis killea: How great is that? thanks Francis
june - lucky
graag gelezen killea: Thanks
June
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